eh not that bad
it's a good loop but you need to make it a bit more orginal it was to predicable to boring now my tips would be spice up the beat tweak the rythm and over all just try somehing new with your next pice but i do think that with some more work you could become really go at this listen to Bafna and see what he dose it's really good so try to see what you can do with the next one